More Friday Fun: Mini-Critiques

So, last Friday I wrote about the death of Festive Fridays and invited guest posts.  I also invited comment on what my Friday feature should be and it turns out a fair number of you wanted examples of good and bad writing.

But I can't do that.

I can't do that because I don't look at writing in terms of good and bad.  I look at it in terms of where it is now, what it is currently accomplishing, and how it could accomplish more. 

So, if you would like some illumination on your writing along those lines, I'm inviting you to send in your work for critique.  I'll alternate critiquing Fridays with guest post Fridays.  Here are the rules, such as they are:

1.  Send ONE paragraph of your work.  I repeat, ONE.  The original idea of having a consistent Friday theme was to make it easier for me to post and if you send more I'll get overwhelmed and have to quit.

2. Put FRIDAY MINI-CRITIQUE in the subject line. Okay, it doesn't have to be in all caps, I just did that for emphasis.  (See below, please.)

3. Tell me a tiny bit about it–ie, its from a novel, a non-fiction piece, etc.

4.  Tell me if you want your name used (and a link) or if you wish to be anonymous.

5.  I will point out 1 to 3 things that are working well, and 1-3 things that could work a bit better.

Okay?  Okay.  I'm excited.  Thanks to all of you who suggested something along these lines, including Ledger, Derek, and Susan.

Did I miss anyone?  If so, forgive me.

ADDENDUM:  The paragraph should be a maximum of 250 words and in case it wasn't obvious from the above, email it to me at

**The photo is of a 17th century Commonplace Book from the Beinecke Library.